In response to a Totally Optional Prompt for “Three Dogs“, though my canine mathematics is wrong.
two dogs outside,
I am in a pantomime
dressed as “The Wrong Tree”.
I say my important piece
I sway gently in the leaves,
the barking of dogs,
and the rain,
disrupts my poem.
I say my important piece
I sway gently in the leaves,
my leaves are falling
out of fear
and then,
in scene 4 -
the character of “Rain”
falls upon the pavement
and makes a claim for compensation.
One of the dogs
skips a scene,
brings back a drum.
the other holding it in place,
while a drumstick plays between his teeth,
(because, after all,
is it the drumstick that plays
or is it the drum?)
and then my branch
grows out of the window
and I say -
“stop that noise!”
though my voice is feeble.
turns out,
as a tree,
I have no lines
in the play.

August 14, 2008 at 5:58 pm |
What an intriguing set of images – it reads rather like an account of a very surreal dream! Nice work…
August 14, 2008 at 6:03 pm |
why thank you, lirone! thanks for stopping by.
August 14, 2008 at 8:06 pm |
Interesting piece, for sure! Really enjoyed it…
August 15, 2008 at 12:04 am |
Visually entertaining – a chaotic order to the confusion.
August 15, 2008 at 2:55 am |
Woof!
August 15, 2008 at 8:46 am |
it does feel dreamlike, also feels like a mataphor for life too
August 15, 2008 at 3:16 pm |
Pretty cool stuff, I love the way it moves.
August 15, 2008 at 10:27 pm |
like that song “shaking all over”… plays are always so interesting.. like a japanese kabuki
August 16, 2008 at 9:37 am |
This is truly an interesting piece. Like you feel that you have some power or authority but in the end you realise that you have none…that the only authority you have is that of wishful thinking.
I ended up writing three poems for the TOP prompt:
Dogs of War, Two Pets and My Dog Tom
-Bev
August 24, 2008 at 1:10 pm |
I love that poem! it somehow reminds me of Neil Gaiman’s style of writing.
(sorry for my english, it’s not good) ;]
August 24, 2008 at 10:13 pm |
Thanks apiliszek,
Thanks all.
love.
Pete